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Hello everybody! RaptorTalon here (Again, sheesh. I need to get a life that is more then complaining about my awful excuse for a life to a bunch of strangers who don't care) and well, yesterday I was hit with a brick of disgust, not for myself (well, not in the most straightforward sense) Not for the smell of warm apple sauce, not even Jordan's new icon. (I am joking Jordan, we all love you) I was hit with an idea far more....deep..and complicated then De silva's new arrangement of pixels displayed when he posts. but rather....



I


HATE


MY


STORYLINE.



Quick and to the point :D

I have been thinking about ways to incorporate new ideas into my storyline, and really, I have been hit over and over with the idea that I am just stretching it out for as long as I can, just to please people. but at the core of this story...there lies an issue...right..at...the...core..

HFGA, HFDOD and HFR. totally, utterly, completely, RUINED my storyline, I am not happy with how it came out. and well...this last year has been pretty crazy for me, I have changed a lot as a person, and what I thought would be cool a year ago (Yes, HFGA is almost a year old in a few months) I blazed through my story, making a train-wreak (No, not at midnight, that comes later) My story is filled to the brim with open plots, plot holes, cheap one-off characters. and more. the writing is awful, and for anyone that wants to get into it, TOUGH LUCK SUCKER! You cant even understand it! let alone READ SOME OF IT! so I am taking a step back..and shifting gears..into reboot.


OKAY OKAY OKAY! Before any of you hit that 'remove from favorite builders button' hear me out. I have a ton of issues with my current story, and I piled so much stuff on top that it is ruined and un-salvage able. (heh, Salvaged) but if you really want the main reason, look no further, then the face you see, right next to every post I make. who is that?


RaptorTalon.


My selfMOC.


As a MOC, he is fine, some minor tweaks and stuff (BTW if any of you can figure out a good looking waist, please help) but as a character of RaptorTalon is AWFUL. he was over-powered, special, he was in a relationship (That is not a bad thing, but for the two characters involved..it was cancer. he was so special and boring, he had no personality, he has no anything to make him likable. he is cliche SelfMOC stuff. well...I plan to fix that, I want to make RT into a decent character, same goes for the rest of them.


And guys, my story really has helped me, and you guys helped with your input. Thanks for the support, but this new story should be much better.

thank you, and I value your support.



Comments

 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Windfall the Wanderer A most sensible conclusion, good sir. Best of luck to you.
Thank you.
  October 7, 2015
A most sensible conclusion, good sir. Best of luck to you.
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting De Silva Well, I agree on many points. Very reasonable. Good luck.
thanks.
  October 7, 2015
Well, I agree on many points. Very reasonable. Good luck.
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Earu ,the Wise One Well, I'll finally be able to follow someone's storyline from the beginning now. As for everything else, I wish you the best of luck with your reboot.
lel, yep.
 I like it 
  October 7, 2015
Well, I'll finally be able to follow someone's storyline from the beginning now. As for everything else, I wish you the best of luck with your reboot.
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Traykar the swift If your character is op, give him lots of flaws. For example Traykar is fast, smart, but he has a fear of spiders, slightly monstrous, and puts too much ketchup on chicken sandwiches.(It looks like blood)it would benifet you if the flaws are funny because it makes Your caracter needs to be more human. It would also be good to have stronger villains so that your battles are higher form of warfare.
Kay.
 I like it 
  October 7, 2015
If your character is op, give him lots of flaws. For example Traykar is fast, smart, but he has a fear of spiders, slightly monstrous, and puts too much ketchup on chicken sandwiches.(It looks like blood)it would benifet you if the flaws are funny because it makes Your caracter needs to be more human. It would also be good to have stronger villains so that your battles are higher form of warfare.
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Quartz roolz yea, might do something similar and re-writte TOTTS. going back, the dialog was clunky, and i only made maku, solek and kopeke important. the rest didnt even get a line. but, im going to do TSC S3 first. anyway, yea, self moc syndrome is a b!t(h. i have to admit that, yes, sk suffers from it, but, to fix your problems with RT, make him special, but not too special. for example, bestial has a giant claw and a hulk for...that are evil and want to take over the world. you have to keep things balanced. got a deus ex character, who alwas has the right powers for the situation? nerf them, or kill them, or cut them from the story entirely. but, anyway, good luck
Thanks, I am gonna need it.
 I like it 
  October 7, 2015
yea, might do something similar and re-writte TOTTS. going back, the dialog was clunky, and i only made maku, solek and kopeke important. the rest didnt even get a line. but, im going to do TSC S3 first. anyway, yea, self moc syndrome is a b!t(h. i have to admit that, yes, sk suffers from it, but, to fix your problems with RT, make him special, but not too special. for example, bestial has a giant claw and a hulk for...that are evil and want to take over the world. you have to keep things balanced. got a deus ex character, who alwas has the right powers for the situation? nerf them, or kill them, or cut them from the story entirely. but, anyway, good luck
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Shock TNC I will admit that i was trying to get into your story but never could. But that was because you were so far into it. Some of the stuff you said gave me ideas for my own story line that i never thought of before. But now I get the feeling that my story is not gunna get to many views...even from me :P.....
Yeah, too big and too hard to get into. gonna fix that while I can. and if you post one, I will make sure to check it out!
 I like it 
  October 7, 2015
I will admit that i was trying to get into your story but never could. But that was because you were so far into it. Some of the stuff you said gave me ideas for my own story line that i never thought of before. But now I get the feeling that my story is not gunna get to many views...even from me :P.....
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Wertman 8 The idea of a reboot is interesting. I can understand your fustrations with your earliest work (and hey, nobody's first attempt is ever good) and I can respect your decision. However, I do think Skies of Fallen, Demons of War and Salvaged were good though, and it would be a shame to see them discarded. You could do what I plan to do, and go back and rewrite your first stories so they meet your quality standards, but I'm open to a reboot. It's up to you man, and I'm behind you all the way! :)
Yeah, as much as I did like those story lines, they are to connected to the others, which would cause some...issues. they also have issues of their own, which carry over from the rest. but Thanks Werty, glad to have you.
 I like it 
  October 7, 2015
The idea of a reboot is interesting. I can understand your fustrations with your earliest work (and hey, nobody's first attempt is ever good) and I can respect your decision. However, I do think Skies of Fallen, Demons of War and Salvaged were good though, and it would be a shame to see them discarded. You could do what I plan to do, and go back and rewrite your first stories so they meet your quality standards, but I'm open to a reboot. It's up to you man, and I'm behind you all the way! :)
 I made it 
  October 7, 2015
Quoting Dragoneye Creations Actually, I liked your stories, and I still do. I only recently started reading your stories, and I got hooked. As with the self-MOC, people usually start out with making them more important than their other characters. For me, Dragoneye wasn't special. In fact, I forgot to mention that DE wasn't only unpopular, but somewhat despised by some Le-Matoran. He was considered an outcast as he was quiet and called a "green Ko-Matoran". But the Toa Nuva saw past his personality and into his talents, believing he had something more to his life that making Kanohi. That is me IRL in a nutshell. I'm rejected by many, but accepted by the few. I hope this gives you a confidence boost, Raptor.
Thank you, and I am glad you find entertainment with my storyline. but I personally was not writing a story that I am content with. Thank you.
  October 7, 2015
Actually, I liked your stories, and I still do. I only recently started reading your stories, and I got hooked. As with the self-MOC, people usually start out with making them more important than their other characters. For me, Dragoneye wasn't special. In fact, I forgot to mention that DE wasn't only unpopular, but somewhat despised by some Le-Matoran. He was considered an outcast as he was quiet and called a "green Ko-Matoran". But the Toa Nuva saw past his personality and into his talents, believing he had something more to his life that making Kanohi. That is me IRL in a nutshell. I'm rejected by many, but accepted by the few. I hope this gives you a confidence boost, Raptor.
 
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