Thank you all for reading the story! Sorry for some of the HTML problems and that my editing skills/pictures are kinda garbage at this point, but I hope you all enjoy this story!
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*We Open under Fieldus Magna in cave system*
*We find Voltz overlooking the Cave system as he hangs from a neighboring rock*
*Voltz drops into the Cave System*
*He lands with a mighty stance and overlooks the area around him, His communication device begins to speak*
Shadowflame: Voltz do you come in? Have you reached the examination sight yet?
Voltz: Yes sir, activity seems normal, I will go forward
Shadowflame: Just wait one moment, I have a fellow Toa jumping into the scene with you
*A mysterious White Toa falls into the cave*
*He lands with a graceful step as snow covers his landing*
Cloudburst: Agent Cloudburst reporting for duty oh wise one
*Standing in a mocking, heroic pose, Cloudburst continues*
Cloudburst: I am ready to find the evil menace inside this dangerous cave
Voltz:*In a slightly Sarcastic tone* Always good to have you buddy, let's continue
*Voltz and Cloudburst walk through the cave with no meaningful activity happening*
*They stop as Voltz spots something*
Voltz: Look! On the ground over here!
Cloudburst: What is it? It just looks like a metal ring
Voltz: Its not just that, its some sort of, recording device, like an audio diary..
Cloudburst: We came down here to report on the unusual seismic activity and power fluctuations, not to listen to some old Matoran's cave adventures
Voltz: We better listen anyway, it could be crucial to our mission
*Voltz drops it on the ground and it proceeds to play*
???: Gibberish in what seems to be some form of an ancient matoran language
Cloudburst: Well that is great, we don't even know what this diary is
Voltz: Hold on, I know some of these words, they seems to be part of... Oh no..
Voltz: Look! Over there!
*A cave seems to be glowing with a majestic and powerful green light*
Voltz: We need to go there, right now!
Cloudburst: Whoa wait! What's happening?
Voltz: I'll explain on the way, c'mon!
*The two toa walk into the cave and find a devestating surprise*
Morbus: Finally, it will only take a little more time now
*We see a matoran wrapped in what seems like boned wings, placed next to an ancient mask and weapon*
Cloudburst: Is that what I think it is?
Voltz: Yep, it's a summoning ritual alright, we need to stay quiet, maybe we can get the jump on him..
*Cloudburst jumps towards Morbus in rage*
Cloudburst: No! We need to stop this fast and quick!
Cloudburst: I'll freeze you solid you demonic filth!
*Morbus Grabs Cloudburst with a form of telekinetic power*
Morbus: Stay down, you Protector wanna-be
*Cloudburst is flung to the other side of the cave*
*He lands with a mighty thud, in pain he speaks*
Cloudburst: He's strong Voltz, stronger than I've ever seen him before
*Voltz turns towards Morbus*
Voltz: Do you honestly know what you're doing?! Do you know what consequences you will bring upon the world if you complete this ritual?!
Morbus: Oh yes! And I will rule Fieldus Magna with this power, and be better than Atukam, Hydroxanoid, or Azreal ever was! I will be the most powerful Monarch!
Morbus: And with the ritual component now complete, All I must do now is sacrifice this Matoran's body, and the world will be mine!
*The Ritual continues as the Matoran's body starts to react to the materials set aside him*
*He flies into the air*
*The mask flies onto his face and fuses with his head*
*Morbus stares in triumph*
Morbus: Yes! Finally! The world is mine!
*The Matoran is overtaken with corruption as the mask and wings distort is body, he screams in agony, as a new form awakens*
*Out from the ashes, a new being rises from the Matoran's corpse, bursting with power*
Morbus: Yes! Rise! Rise Sheog'thra! Rise Apocalypse Trigger and do my bidding! I have freed you from your prison and you will serve me in return!
Sheog'thra: *In raspy, almost mechanic voice* Demonic beeing..
Sheog'thra: *He fires his Cannon at Morbus* I serve no one.
Morbus: *He is hit directly in the head*
*Morbus's corpse falls to the ground, his head corroded away into nothing*
*Sheog'thra turns towards Voltz and Cloudburst*
Sheog'thra: Toa, you know my name, and you know what I do, you have one month before Draven arrives..
*He disappears into nothingness*
Voltz: Morbus did it, he summoned him..
Voltz: This is the end...
Cloudburst: The prophecy has been fulfilled? But it's not time!
Voltz: It doesn't matter..He awakened him..The first will gas the world in disease, leaving the sky drenched with toxin. The second will light the match to ignite the gas, setting the world in fire. The third will put out the fire with the tears of sorrows, leaving the world in endless floods. When the final Trigger appears, he will leave no mercy, he will leave nothing but dust and ashes. With his arrival, the world will be destroyed.
Cloudburst: Which means..that..
Voltz: We have less than a month before the Apocalypse Triggers try to destroy the world...
Awesome opening man! I really enjoyed it! The characters are likable and the actual premise does a good job of setting things up and hooking people in (including me :P). One thing I think could be improved though is that I think you should add some effects, such as the shot killing Morbus. Anyway, Can't wait to read more, man!