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A Pattern in the Stars: Chapter 1, Of Annoyance and Aggravation
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Chapter 1
Of Annoyance and Aggravation


The sky was of a dull grey hue, peppered lightly with even darker puffs of inky clouds, and the sun, white and cold, shone down, emitting a dim light upon all that passed beneath it‘s rays. The wind was terribly strong, flowing through the air in a torrent, causing each tree that was struck by it‘s waves to sway like a great ship in a violent storm, being tossed from side to side by powerful white horses spurring up from the blue.

The flaps of his tent entrance billowed, and the cold air snuck in, brushing Cirion‘s face, his dark hair rippling softly.

“Cirion! Get over here!”

He sighed irritatedly at the loud, rough sound of his Captain, Tulin, yelling at him.

As well as the dreadful weather, he found that his younger brother, Tadren’s, whining was already enough to ruin his days.

Tadren was twenty-five, merely two years younger than twenty-seven-year-old Cirion, and still found the time to complain constantly of subjects that did not really require any complaint.

Rising slowly and wearily off his bed, the young man departed his tent and sauntered through the busy camp over to where Tulin was seated, rather uncomfortably, upon the stump of a cloven tree, brooding darkly as he always was.



Tulin straightened up from his seat immediately as Cirion appeared through his tent entrance, and spoke gruffly to him even before he reached the captains space,

“I want you and your brother to go out hunting,” he gestured briefly over to the dark forest we had set up camp across from just the night before.

It sent a cold shiver straight down Cirion’s spine. Goodness knew what cruel and vile beasts lay waiting for them beyond that shadowy border of dark, overhanging trees.

Cirion then turned his gaze back to Tulin. “Are you sure it’s safe?” he asked, a visibly concerned look crossing his young face.

Tulin was silent for a few nervous moments, pondering deeply on how to respond to Cirion’s question.

“No,” he replied, after his long while of hesitation, “It is indeed not safe to go in there… Though I trust you to stay safe from dark things. You always have and I see no reason for you to turn from that path.”



“Of course not, Tulin,” Cirion answered genuinely, “Out of curiosity, why is it I and Tadren who have to go? You certainly have plenty other Rangers at hand who could go hunting.”

Tulin sighed deeply in absolute exasperation, and began to wonder how Cirion never, ever ceased to ask questions.

“That, Cirion, is a question with no need for an answer. I should see you two brothers leaving within an hour!”

“We will be, Tulin, don’t worry,” Cirion shouted behind himself as he walked off to search the Ranger camp high and low for Tadren, fetching his equipment from the tent before doing so.



Cirion found his younger brother seated with his back against a great tree, one of Tulin’s many books in his hands, and his eyes wandering lightly over the pages. He had no love for reading, though did so when he could find nothing else to spend his time doing.

“Tadren,” Cirion questioned his brother, “We have to go hunting. Captains orders.”

“Out there?” Tadren whipped his eyes from the words and glanced over to the forest. He groaned in protest. “Well, at least it’s something to do,” mumbled Tadren, as he he picked up his bow from where it lay on the ground and swung his quiver over his shoulder.


Now came the the dismal and shadowy trek through the forest on the hunt for game.



Comments

 I made it 
  February 15, 2015
Quoting Joseph Olson Your writing is superb! While the lack of plot and characterization are pressed very hard against the reader, the writing itself is good. May I suggest you come up with a threat a little less melodramatic then entering a dark forest, they are rangers after all. Also, building a scene to go along with it is one way to gain more respect and views. My suggestion: check out the Writers group and read some of the creations there. Overall though, the idea is very good! And if you can get your plot and characterization up to snuff I believe you could become one of the better writers on Da' Pages! Keep it up!
Hey, thanks! I understand, while I was writing this I was planning on building up the characters. And "entering a dark forest" wasn‘t really the problem of the story, entering the dark forest was going to lead up to more dramatic events, that would lead up to even more dramatic events... :P But thank you anyways! I haven‘t been working on this story recently though, unfortunately.
 I like it 
  February 6, 2015
Your writing is superb! While the lack of plot and characterization are pressed very hard against the reader, the writing itself is good. May I suggest you come up with a threat a little less melodramatic then entering a dark forest, they are rangers after all. Also, building a scene to go along with it is one way to gain more respect and views. My suggestion: check out the Writers group and read some of the creations there. Overall though, the idea is very good! And if you can get your plot and characterization up to snuff I believe you could become one of the better writers on Da' Pages! Keep it up!
 I made it 
  January 18, 2015
Quoting = Nathaniel = You are a great writer!!
My thanks! :D
 I like it 
  January 17, 2015
You are a great writer!!
 I made it 
  January 9, 2015
Quoting ARCtrooper Argo Amazing story, as usual.... Bern. :P Glad to see your enjoying MOCpages! -Argo
Thanks... B0. :P Yeah, I‘ve always wanted to join, but my mom wouldn‘t let me... Thanks for inviting me, that‘s what made her let me. XD
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ARCtrooper Argo
  January 8, 2015
Amazing story, as usual.... Bern. :P Glad to see your enjoying MOCpages! -Argo
 I made it 
  January 8, 2015
Quoting Arveldir Of Norgate sweet!
Thanks!
 I like it 
  January 8, 2015
sweet!
 I made it 
  January 8, 2015
Thank you!
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  January 8, 2015
Sweet!
 I like it 
  January 8, 2015
Great story!
 
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