We had been following the horde of Urak hai for over a week now. At first we thought this a raiding party, then we noticed the direction they were heading...Rhun. Upon a closer inspection we notice a cart with a chest being pulled. A few days later the main horde moves south west, while the leader and the man pulling the cart break south-east. Myself and Obrandus, take a few men and follow them while Bonnaluire and our main forces follow the horde. They meet up with a small band of Easterlings. We can't risk them receiving anymore reinforcements. The next day we decide to move ahead of them during the night and ambush them on the ridges ahead. They shall not enjoy the fruits of their unholy labors this day....
This one is a definite improvement. Landscaping is always hard for me though, so it's not like I can really criticize it. I really like that you added the little crack with the snake coming out of it. Those kinds of details really bring something to life.